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- The question of whether Vance was dead or not became more than academic when he found himself in a bathtub up to his chin in ice water like some forgotten cocktail garnish, a demonic woman standing over him, and no memory of how he got there. But that question was one among legion, because what memories he did have were as comforting as a blackjack in the dark. So it wasn’t surprising when he found out that trouble was his business, and business was kicking his door down.
2018 Writer's Digest Self Published Book Awards Commentary for Parallel Visions: City of Angels City of Demons
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PARALLEL VISIONS, City of Angels, City of Demons, by Fritz Freiheit, is an extraordinary book full of science fiction fantasy plot complications, unusual characters and locations.
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2018 Writer's Digest Self Published Book Awards Commentary
Below is a brief commentary for your entry in the 26th Annual Writer's Digest Self-Published Book Awards:
Entry Title: | Parallel Visions: City of Angels City of Demons |
Author: | Fritz Freiheit |
Judge Number: | 17 |
Entry Category: | Genre Fiction |
Evaluated on a scale of 1 to 5, with 1 meaning "needs improvement" and 5 meaning "outstanding".
Structure, Organization, and Pacing: | 5 |
Spelling, Punctuation, and Grammar: | 5 |
Production Quality and Cover Design: | 4 |
Plot and Story Appeal: | 4 |
Character Appeal and Development: | 4 |
Voice and Writing Style: | 5 |
Judge's Commentary*
PARALLEL VISIONS, City of Angels, City of Demons, by Fritz Freiheit, is an extraordinary book full of science fiction fantasy plot complications, unusual characters and locations. It poses some problems for the average reader who is not yet accustomed to the interaction of Angels and Demons. Nevertheless, the book is entertaining with its plot and unusual characters. The challenges that the lead character, Mr. Vance Coreman, faces seem overwhelming, but he survives each situation with steady, or perhaps not quite steady, fortitude. The author does an excellent job with this novel, managing unusual characters, difficult plots, demons firing machine guns, women with scarlet features, etc. Very little is left out as far as characters and plot and magic. If you are bored with your usual reading, this might be the book for you. The problem is not the writing skills, but I think the presentation could be improved. I question the need for a table of contents for the average fiction reader. That technique seems more appropriate for the writer who wants to consult certain chapters for rewrites. Also, the print could be larger and darker for easy enjoyment of this entertaining book. Toward the end. P. 231 in particular, I found several small errors, nothing serious. Congratulations on giving the readers an entertaining and unusual book.
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