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Exposition paragraph into dialogue example from "The Shaper's Daughter"
Emerging from a comprehensive mammalian Shaping sim at eleven o'clock, she grabbed a lunch packed by Henri, the Shaped lemur who managed the kitchen biots, and started on her daily three hours of physical training. Today it was an excursion out to Monk Falls and back. Even including a leisurely lunch overlooking the Falls it was a round trip that she could easily run within the alloted time. It was one of her favorite runs as the Falls provided a magnificent vista. She would sit watching the Monk River tumbling over the edge of the mesa and disappearing into a white cloud of mist as it broke up long before it reached the jungle far below. On a clear day she could even make out Fear Mesa jutting up out of the dense lowland jungle, the next mesa north in the archipelago.
Shortly before eleven Trinette emerged from a comprehensive mammalian Shaping sim and padded into the kitchen, her moccasins silent on the organic composite floor. "Henri?" she called out. Henri swung down from one of his perches and leapt to land lightly on the counter next to her. "Ah, Mistress Trinette! You are going on a run perhaps, and are looking for a little sustenance from Henri?" the Shaped silver and black lemur said in his high pitched voice. Trinette smiled. The ritual was the same everyday. "If you wouldn't mind Master Henri." "Oh, no bother, no bother," Henri said as he signaled a kitchen biot, a nameless, roughly human shaped golem that was the result of one her mothers early experiments. It trundled over to the cooler and disappeared within. "Where are you going this fine day, Trinette? Perhaps to Rennie Lake or maybe the Tom Tom Caves?" As Henri chattered he swung over to an inverted step pyramid projecting down from the ceiling. It glowed with a warm light indistinguishable from the sun's. Each step was a shelf from which grew a bewildering chaos of fruit and vegetables in various states of maturity. "I was thinking I would run out to Monk Falls," Trinette replied. The biot returned from the cooler and started to prepare sandwiches at the counter. "Ah, ah, Monk Falls, you say? One of your favorites, I think," Henri said as he plucked several pink and yellow apples from the pyramid then leapt gracefully to the shoulder of the biot. "Rimbaldi is always waxing eloquent about their beauty. Of the magnificence of the vista. Someday I will have to accompany the two of you there. By the way, where is the old chap? It is not like him to be far from you for long." It took a moment for Trinette to respond as the memory of watching the Monk River welled up within her. Like all her memories, if she was not careful to suppress or filter them, it came back as nearly a full sensoria. For a moment she found herself re-experiencing it, back on the sun warmed rock, breathing in the rich scents of the forest and river bank while watching the Monk River tumble over the edge of the mesa with a muted roar. It disappeared into a white cloud of mist and an arching rainbow as it broke up long before it reached the jungle far below. In the distance, out across the jungle choked lowlands, she could just see Fear Mesa, the next mesa north in the archipelago, jutting up like a distant castle wall. Shutting down the memory sensoria she replied: "He is with Mother. Presumably reviewing the rest of today's lessons." "And what have you been studying this morning?" "Still doing the higher mammalian Shaping, but Mother says I am about ready to move on to humans." "Humans? That is wonderful news. Soon you will be Shaping yourself," Henri said as he directed the biot to pack the lunch into a pouch. "But you were in a sim all morning? Do you want me to pack extra water? I know how sims can dehydrate." "No, no, that won't be necessary." "You drank enough when you unjacked, then?" Henri said solicitously. "Oh, yes. Rimbaldi reminded me." "Good, good. Here I will pack you some electrolyte gum." The biot reached into a drawer and pulled out a handful of gray wafers and as it handed them to Henri it clumsily dropped a few. Henri patted the biot affectionately before deftly scooping up the wafers from the counter and placing them in the pouch. "Thank you, Henri." Sometimes Trinette wondered when Henri was going to get tired of the old kitchen biots and have them replaced with her mother's current models. The newest ones would never have dropped the gum. In fact, they were quite capable of plucking the falling wafers from the air. This would have been obvious to Henri if he had attended one of her combat practice sessions with the golem biots, and seen the testament to their speed written on her in bruises and broken bones. But she knew he would never trade the old biots in. "Don't mention it. I will have a snack prepared for your return. You will be back by 2:00, I presume?" "Yes, that would be great! Definitely by 2:00," Trinette responded as she scooped up the lunch pouch and headed for the door. There would be more than enough time to make the round trip in three hours, including a leisurely lunch overlooking the Falls. "See you later," she said with a little wave. "Fair you well," Henri replied and he directed the biot to start preparing lunch for the Shaper.
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